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Breakaway~totheweird » Mon Apr 11, 2016 3:08 pm[/url]"]What would you do in regards to that specific portion of the storyline, then? If I can make this aspect well-rounded, what details am I missing? This thread is meant for what other people would like to see (and critiques). Otherwise, I wouldn't have slapped it on the forums.

Lay it on me.

I would present an alternative route (or routes) depending on how/if they fit with the direction of the story (which I have no clue as to what you and Chaos have intended for the event series so that part is ney-impossible for me to really give a proper say). I'd possibly break the remaining participants into smaller groups that are easier to co-ordinate until later in the plot, use them to explore the alternate routes (in-part on the forums if allowed to help give added schedule flexibility to the event series).

With that being said, I wouldn't out-right change the fact something like "the weapon" has already been mentioned because it's overall detrimental and sloppy to make post-edits, also it's an avenue that deserves to be explored by you, the story-teller at least once. This is as much of an art as music or painting is so it's important to test things/plot devices/common story arcs to put your own spin on them, even if they may not pan out well in the end.

. . . I'm not sure if I'm hitting the on-topic mark anymore, Bria. Sorry if I went off-trail. x_x